Editing Development From Draft

From my first draft, I have taken on board some of the feedback and will try to incorporate this into my final cut. In order to do this I have re-uploaded the footage to start from scratch again to try to get things right and how I want them. By doing it this was I wont get confused by what I have already done and can do it more precisely than I did with my quickly edited first draft. I will also start to play around with the footage more, adding effects and possibly some transitions in order to enhance the flow and continuity of the video.